A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.•describe the benefits

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team

• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts

• say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir,

I am writing this to share my opinion regarding the implementations your company is going to do in our area.Residence in our locality are very happy with the announcement of sponsoring for sports team for children.At the same time, youngster's are very excited with the idea of music concert.

Actually,there are many children's interested in sports in our community. Additionally,this will encourage young one's towards different games. Nowadays,Children's mostly spend their time for education or by watching movies.Indirectly,this will help them to plan their daily routines by spending some time for physical activities.

Basically,concerts will be enjoyable for all the generations.In my view there will be no one without any interest on music. This will mostly benefit individualsonly for short time to enjoy.It is only upto that evening.In my view there is no future advantages with this concert idea.

I think, if your company sponsor amount for children's sports team will be more helpful than spending for concerts. After considering views of my neighbours I'm conveying you my feedback.

I would be thankful to you for allowing time to consider this.

Thanking you.

Yours Sincerely,

Abc.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, regarding, so, i think, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1034.0 937.175257732 110% => OK
No of words: 188.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5 4.54256449028 121% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.55798186448 2.54303337028 140% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.659574468085 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 313.2 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.4587059447 44.8134815571 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.4 76.5299724578 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 4.34317383033 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 2.54639175258 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254905065036 0.216113520407 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0960403660184 0.0766984524023 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104835193136 0.0603063233224 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157151566093 0.12726935374 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810150555378 0.0580467560999 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 8.37731958763 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 70.7449484536 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 8.71597938144 168% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 8.62886597938 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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