A local magazine has asked for the opinion of readers as to how the magazine could be improved Write to the magazine Telling them why your read it What you like and dislike about it What improvements you would like to see in it

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A local magazine has asked for the opinion of readers as to how the magazine could be improved. Write to the magazine
Telling them why your read it
What you like and dislike about it
What improvements you would like to see in it

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to you regarding seeking suggestions by your magzine to make it more attractive for readers. Let me explain to you in more detail.
I am a student of M.Com and I am currently preparing for bank exams, and one of the tutor has informed me about your magzine 1 year ago. Since then I have been regularly followed each and every sections of your blog. As it inculcates, lot of stuff related to current trend, economic and other important editiorial. secondly, your writing style and vocabulary part is unique, which engulf my knowledge and uplift my reading habit on daily basis.
Further, I would also like to infrom that, in today's scenario I think you are the best for younger generation, which provide the realvant material under one roof. However, some suggestion I may that during last 2 month I found that the advertisement have been quite increased on the magzine considerably as compared to older days. secondly, the entertainment, fun and cartoon section, not to be seen on current edition.

In view of above, I request you to kindly reduced the advertisement by some extent and secondly, the fun and cartoon page in which the entertainment such as sudoku and cartoon section has to be added back.
I hope the above suggestion would help you to increase sale and looking forward to see positive response.
Regards,
Ram

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...conomic and other important editiorial. secondly, your writing style and vocabulary part...
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...entertainment, fun and cartoon section, not to be seen on current edition. ...
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...ou to increase sale and looking forward to see positive response. Regards, Ram
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, as to, i think, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.85567010309 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1147.0 937.175257732 122% => OK
No of words: 235.0 206.0 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88085106383 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73168289596 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634042553191 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 360.0 290.88556701 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.4687737823 44.8134815571 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.272727273 76.5299724578 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3636363636 16.8248392259 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36363636364 4.34317383033 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 2.54639175258 432% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153353555626 0.216113520407 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491476595886 0.0766984524023 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386165743913 0.0603063233224 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0844094660065 0.12726935374 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238867732299 0.0580467560999 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 8.37731958763 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 7.59969072165 117% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 41.2886597938 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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