Nowadays, parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development?
In this modern era, everyone wants success in their lives at any cost. Owing to this a lot of pressure given by gardian to their young child to get extraordinary success. According to me, this is a deterimental development which I will elborate with suitable illustartions.
Firstly, parents think that only success can bring happiness to their child’s life. If they want to be marry, they need success. Owing to this, gardian challenges a lot to child. Somewhere they deem that it is compulsory to have all the materialist things which others have. Another reason is peer pressure which they face at school or social fuctions where parents tend to compare their child with others. For example, after a school exam, parents would like to know marks of other classmates too. Ultimatelly, young one feel presured all the time.
In my opinion this trend having a deterimental effects on children’s mind, due to this they cannot think out of the box, not only this, but also they become part of rat race and do the same thing which others do. Children cannot develop their creativity and they afraid to do something new because child thinks that if they will no be successful then parents may blame. For instance, my one of bosom friends wanted to become singer but his parents forced him to become doctor. Currently, he is just a doctor by prefession not by heart.
In conclusion, owing to materialist thing and peer presure parents force their young child to become successful. However, child do not get proper exposer to do what they want and they avoid to do anything new.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...ung child to get extraordinary success. According to me, this is a deterimental development whi...
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Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: I_AFRAID[2]
Message: You miss the verb here. You should rather write: 'they're afraid'.
Suggestion: they're afraid
...ren cannot develop their creativity and they afraid to do something new because child think...
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Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: NOW[3]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... because child thinks that if they will no be successful then parents may blame. F...
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Line 4, column 184, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'avoid doing'.
Suggestion: avoid doing
...r exposer to do what they want and they avoid to do anything new.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1310.0 937.175257732 140% => OK
No of words: 272.0 206.0 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81617647059 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 3.78020617076 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56362590254 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 127.690721649 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584558823529 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 391.5 290.88556701 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 1.44329896907 554% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1424296286 44.8134815571 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.875 76.5299724578 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 4.34317383033 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262341899879 0.216113520407 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083225046999 0.0766984524023 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569116318987 0.0603063233224 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170343933502 0.12726935374 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369203391462 0.0580467560999 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 41.2886597938 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.