Some people say that a person's success is a result of the way they were brought up by their parents. Do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Some people say that a person's success is a result of the way they were brought up by their parents. Do you agree or disagree

Upbringing during a child formative years is certainly important. For thus reason, some people argue that the success of a person depends on how they are brought up. I strongly disagree with this notion, as hard work and perseverance is a key factor in becoming a successful person.

Hard work is a major factor when it comes to success. A person might be brought up in a proper way with good ethical and moral behavior, but, if that person is not hard-working it will not amount to success. A fundamental reason for this is that one success depends largely on the amount of work they put in, rather than the upbringing they had. For instance, George "Babe" Ruth who was not raised up in the best possible way still became a success due to his hard work.

Perseverance is a steadfast and never give up attitude that is an essential element needed to achieve a high level of success. This is a skill that cannot be taught by parents during the process of bringing up a child. One will have to learn to persistent themselves, thus, the reason why the success of a person does not depends on their parents upbringing.

In conclusion, despite the important of parents upbringing during the early stages of one's life, the success of a person is greatly attributed to their hard work and perseverance

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 84, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...o success. A person might be brought up in a proper way with good ethical and moral behavior, b...
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Line 5, column 323, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'depend'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: depend
...on why the success of a person does not depends on their parents upbringing. In conc...
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Line 5, column 323, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'depend'
Suggestion: depend
...on why the success of a person does not depends on their parents upbringing. In conc...
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Line 7, column 87, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...s upbringing during the early stages of ones life, the success of a person is greatl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, thus, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1084.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 230.0 206.0 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71304347826 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75329670071 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.622605031667 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 327.6 290.88556701 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.7650736874 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5454545455 76.5299724578 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9090909091 16.8248392259 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81818181818 4.34317383033 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247101655198 0.216113520407 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100805761838 0.0766984524023 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775913526266 0.0603063233224 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157855372775 0.12726935374 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595026957048 0.0580467560999 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 8.37731958763 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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