Some people think that people moving to a new country should accept new culture in the foreign country rather than living as a separate minority group with different lifestyle Do you agree or disagree

Recently, it seems that more people tend to migrate than ever before. Whereas many individuals concede that immigrants should adapt to a new culture in the foreign nation, it is believed by others that living as a separate minority group with an unlike lifestyle is the way that they should live. From my observation, much as each point of view has its own benefits, the immigrants should admit regulations in their new region.

On the one hand, if non-native residents keep their traditions and live together in a small community, they will not suffer from homesickness and the community is able to help them in any difficult situations. It is undeniable that when newcomers settle in a new country, they will face a lot of hardships, which make them feel depressed and exhausted. Thus, the presence of a person or a group who can share their stories and give them a hand is vitally crucial. This makes them become more vigorous and minimizes the feeling of nostalgia.

On the other hand, notwithstanding the aforementioned advantage of establishing a minority society, adopting the cultural changes in a new place enables immigrants to enhance social cohesion. It is irrefutable to note that the inhabitants of a nation take pride in their own cultural features. Consequently, if an outsider refuses their culture and has a sign showing a lack of respect for native cultures, the residents will feel irrigated and isolated an outsider. Furthermore, exposure to other cultures is also beneficial to settlers as it broadens their knowledge and horizons. To illustrate, most of the students who study abroad feel culture shock at the country that they are moving to. Nevertheless, after a long time changing their lifestyle in such a way that appreciates the social norms of their adopted region, they will find common characteristics with the locals and widen their minds concerning their foreign nations.

To summarize, albeit merits related to living as a separate minority group, it is assumed that living in a new country and conforming to the standards of behavior will improve the integration of newcomers into society and deepen their perspective about the non-native region in general and the cultures in specific.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, thus, whereas, in general, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 5.05154639175 257% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 3.03092783505 429% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 26.3917525773 182% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 937.175257732 199% => OK
No of words: 365.0 206.0 177% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12054794521 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 3.78020617076 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93095629192 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 127.690721649 161% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561643835616 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 290.88556701 204% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 1.44329896907 416% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.1455525073 44.8134815571 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.5 76.5299724578 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0714285714 16.8248392259 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 4.34317383033 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229553318904 0.216113520407 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748813880073 0.0766984524023 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075040119373 0.0603063233224 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155565499136 0.12726935374 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0901726569688 0.0580467560999 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 8.37731958763 187% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 70.7449484536 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 7.45979381443 180% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 8.71597938144 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 7.59969072165 125% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 41.2886597938 254% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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