Write a letter to the company. In your letterdescribe the benefits of sponsoring the sports teamsummarise the benefits of paying for the concertssay how you think the company should spend the money

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Write a letter to the company. In your letter
describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir,
One of your executives approached me yesterday at my house and explained about your company community support program. Since your company has already decided to support one of two initiatives, I shall restrict my feedback on two selected options.
The first option i.e.” Local children’s Sports team for two years” will help the kids to get more focus while playing. It is generally seen that whenever any corporate is attached to local team, the publicity and media attentions increase exponentially. In addition, local team shall be mentored by the professional coach which not only improve the game but also instill confidence being part of the larger organization.
The other option “to pay for two open-air concerts” going to be favorite among music lovers. You might be aware that this county is famous for music lovers especially singing and playing guitars. In last British Got talent program, of four finalists, three were from this county. Sponsoring two concerts will give more opportunity to local singers to perform with professional ones.
In my view, though 2nd option looks more interesting to me, 1st option is the requirement for the local children as not many organizations take interest in kids club. So, I believe that your company should support local children’s sports team for two years.

Yours faithfully
TOM

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, One of your executives approached me yes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, look, so, still, while, in addition, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1168.0 937.175257732 125% => OK
No of words: 218.0 206.0 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35779816514 4.54256449028 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91340383265 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 127.690721649 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.678899082569 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 351.0 290.88556701 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 1.44329896907 416% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4688726982 44.8134815571 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3333333333 76.5299724578 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 16.8248392259 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 4.34317383033 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118192720173 0.216113520407 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483883051692 0.0766984524023 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447980225244 0.0603063233224 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0721145726146 0.12726935374 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029722446908 0.0580467560999 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 8.37731958763 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 8.71597938144 155% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 41.2886597938 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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