Write a letter to a friend to ask for his/her help to collect money for a charity organization. The letter needs to cover the following details.- why do you want to collect money for the charity organization?- Ask your friend to help- explain in detail ho

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Write a letter to a friend to ask for his/her help to collect money for a charity organization. The letter needs to cover the following details.
- why do you want to collect money for the charity organization?
- Ask your friend to help
- explain in detail how your friend can help.

Dear John,

It's been so long since we last met. I hope you and your family are all well! I'm writing this letter to seek your help to raise fund for a charity organization.

This charity organization is Red-Cross, they are saving 3 life in every blood which we donated, however, they now need more fund to support for developing and improving life-style in Africa where belongs to the third-world countries. This fund-raising activity is very meaningful and means a lot to those people who cannot live theirs' normal life as same as us, due to the natural disaster like desertification.

Since, you've been a doctor without borders for a decade and you're very familiar with the difficulties of those people who live in the poor countries. So, you're the best candidate that I can think of so far, and you're exceedingly capable enough to assist us to increase the charity fund.

Please record a short interview video and send back to us via email. The video recording should include the details of whose we would help and what is the most important thing about this charity, perhaps, you could share a bit of your personal experience while working as a doctor in the undeveloped countries.

Kind Regards,

Eddie

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, third, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1016.0 937.175257732 108% => OK
No of words: 209.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86124401914 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67145087957 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.66028708134 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 312.3 290.88556701 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.6994489425 44.8134815571 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.888888889 76.5299724578 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2222222222 16.8248392259 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 4.34317383033 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172291740936 0.216113520407 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644635363757 0.0766984524023 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0863818962148 0.0603063233224 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111663315311 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0705104935505 0.0580467560999 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 8.37731958763 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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