You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter give details of your study plansexplain why yo

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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

give details of your study plans

explain why you want to get a part-time job

suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear John,

It's been a long time since we met, I hope you and your family are all well! I' m writing this letter to seek your help in my job hunting whilst I' m completing my post-graduate degree in United Kingdom, where you live.

As you know, I' m urge to study in one of the world-famous universities, and I' ve sent multiple applications for enrolling their post-graduate 2-year courses of professional management. After I received an admission offer from Oxford on my interest last month. I was immensely happy and shocked. So, I will be in England in next month.

I' ve applied for study-sponsorship from the local government youth study allowance, however, the allowance will not pay-off my utilities fee, such as electricity fees and water fees. I' m looking for a job to support my daily expenses as well as bills.

I know you' ve been working as a human-resources manager for many years and you are very familiar with all the industries. I hope you can give me a hand on finding a part-job, this can help me to solve the financial issues while I'm studying.

Kind Regards,
Eddie

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 23, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'studying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: studying
...ere you live. As you know, I m urge to study in one of the world-famous universities...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 186, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ear courses of professional management. After I received an admission offer from Oxfo...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... my daily expenses as well as bills. I know you ve been working as a human-res...
^
Line 9, column 123, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... very familiar with all the industries. I hope you can give me a hand on finding ...
^
Line 9, column 229, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
... me to solve the financial issues while Im studying. Kind Regards, Eddie ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, look, so, well, while, such as, you know, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 910.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 194.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69072164948 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02913896295 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649484536082 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 276.3 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.6527493987 44.8134815571 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 76.5299724578 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 16.8248392259 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 4.34317383033 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290213575406 0.216113520407 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843431929978 0.0766984524023 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0897955065656 0.0603063233224 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166480275253 0.12726935374 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0991028864366 0.0580467560999 171% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 8.37731958763 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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