Write a letter to a friend to ask for his/her help to collect money for a charity organization. The letter needs to cover the following details. - why do you want to collect money for the charity organization? - Ask your friend to help - explain in detail

Dear Bart,

I have been looking for an occasion to write to you and I think I could not have found any other occasion than this one.

As you know, I have been associated with Children of Africa for almost a decade now. Recently, I have been made the director of the new project which will require me to move to Namibia to overlook the expansion there. I have been wanting this for a while.

I want you to help in fundraising for the project. I think there is nobody else who can compete with you socially, being a social media icon and I know your little effort can have an impressive impact on donations for us.

I am hosting a fundraiser on 23 June at Emerson Hall and I want you to share it on your social media and ask people to come in large numbers and support our cause or you can also share the online link which I will share with you at the venue.

I hope to see you at the fundraiser and help me in my cause.

Thanking you,
Brad Jason

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Bart, I have been looking for an occasion to w...
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Line 5, column 226, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...to overlook the expansion there. I have been wanting this for a while. I want you to hel...
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Line 7, column 52, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...to help in fundraising for the project. I think there is nobody else who can comp...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ressive impact on donations for us. I am hosting a fundraiser on 23 June at E...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... I will share with you at the venue. I hope to see you at the fundraiser and h...
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Line 13, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d help me in my cause. Thanking you, Brad Jason
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, so, while, i think, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 779.0 937.175257732 83% => OK
No of words: 186.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.18817204301 4.54256449028 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.18568721032 2.54303337028 86% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575268817204 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 248.4 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.4701580124 44.8134815571 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5555555556 76.5299724578 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 16.8248392259 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 4.34317383033 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170732162502 0.216113520407 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910624156539 0.0766984524023 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689603894791 0.0603063233224 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0963412555717 0.12726935374 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326015942545 0.0580467560999 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 8.37731958763 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.02 8.71597938144 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.