You are going to another country to study You would like to do a part time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help Write a letter to this friend In your letter Give details of your study plans Explain why you w

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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

Give details of your study plans

Explain why you want to get a part-time job

Suggest how your friend could help you find a job

dear Ali, I hope all is well. I'm going to start a dental photography course on May 15th  in London. This is a 6-month course and it's include many tips and techniques for taking professional photos from patients' face and mouth. Also, there is a final exam after course, held by London University, and they will give a valuable degree afterward. 
I have bought a DSLR camera which cost me an arm and a leg and bunch of accessories. and now, I barely can afford my flight ticket. so, I need to find a part-time job no matter if it is related to dentistry or not, I just want to try a different life while I'm there.
 so, please search for some jobs like playing piano in a restaurant. I know you have a famous restaurant there and probably you can help me to find a place to play and practice and earn money. Also, please ask around if it is possible for me to drive With my driving license in Britain so,I can work as a taxi driver there.
 I hope to see you soon my friend.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Dear
dear Ali, I hope all is well. Im going to st...
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Line 1, column 31, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
dear Ali, I hope all is well. Im going to start a dental photography cou...
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Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a dental photography course on May 15th  in London. This is a 6-month course and ...
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Line 1, column 344, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y will give a valuable degree afterward.  I have bought a DSLR camera which cost m...
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Line 2, column 86, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...arm and a leg and bunch of accessories. and now, I barely can afford my flight tick...
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Line 2, column 133, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
..., I barely can afford my flight ticket. so, I need to find a part-time job no matt...
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Line 2, column 258, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...just want to try a different life while Im there.  so, please search for some job...
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Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help me find' instead.
Suggestion: help me find
...s restaurant there and probably you can help me to find a place to play and practice and earn m...
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Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
...ve With my driving license in Britain so,I can work as a taxi driver there.  I ho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 795.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 187.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.2513368984 4.54256449028 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42536804108 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.689839572193 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 249.3 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7921395664 44.8134815571 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.5 76.5299724578 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 4.34317383033 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197112142742 0.216113520407 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703958607686 0.0766984524023 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728611602146 0.0603063233224 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121718013116 0.12726935374 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740956347492 0.0580467560999 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 8.37731958763 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 70.7449484536 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.37 8.71597938144 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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