You are organising a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia.Write to the manager of Student Hostel Services. In your letter, explain:when you want to visit the Snowy Mountainshow long you wil

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You are organising a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia.
Write to the manager of Student Hostel Services. In your letter, explain:

when you want to visit the Snowy Mountains
how long you will stay
how many students are in your party and what accommodation you will require
Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Rona Olivar and I had a phone conversation with you last week. I am organizing a group of students from Perth Elementary School to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a study tour. As a student adviser, I am writing to you regarding some information we need to reserve your hostel.

Firstly, we will be visiting the mountains on 25th April, next Saturday. I and my students will be staying in your hostel for seven days because we will be conducting a long educational trip in those snowy mountains. Secondly, the group has twenty members in total including me. So we will need at least 8 rooms to accommodate us. We are looking for something cheap and expecting a discount from you. I would like to know if you can provide us with the required accommodation at your hostel and if so, how I can reserve it.

I am looking forward to your immediate attention with regards to my queries.

Yours faithfully,

Rona Olivar

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, at least

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 792.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 172.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60465116279 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73964938364 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.633720930233 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 241.2 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3904383402 44.8134815571 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.0 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6363636364 16.8248392259 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09090909091 4.34317383033 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.94845360825 203% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299030626018 0.216113520407 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102701459249 0.0766984524023 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882262576734 0.0603063233224 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184153868893 0.12726935374 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124814582096 0.0580467560999 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 8.37731958763 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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