You are a secretary, planning a corporate event. Write a letter to Entertainment Company explaining the kind of party you would like to organize, indicate the date and time of the event and your special requests.

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You are a secretary, planning a corporate event. Write a letter to Entertainment Company explaining the kind of party you would like to organize, indicate the date and time of the event and your special requests.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am a secretary at Etrust Co Ltd and I am responsible for planning our company’s annual dinner party. I am writing to explain about our requirements for that party.

We would like to celebrate our company’s annual party as dinner party at Novotel Hotel on 17th October at 7:00 PM. Our aim is to have an amusing event for all of our staff members. In the party, we would like to start with a live music show before dinner is served.

We also want to include a magic show after the dinner and before we conclude the event, we would like to arrange some indoor games which all of our staff members can participate.

Apart from these, I would like to request an experienced event ambassador, who can speak both English and Mandarin fluently for this party as we are inviting some of the staff from our China branch office.

If you need further information you can contact me via email chris@etrust.com or call my office number 67890987.

Yours faithfully,

Chris Lambert

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 159, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ently for this party as we are inviting some of the staff from our China branch office. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, apart from, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 841.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 175.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80571428571 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74438052934 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 127.690721649 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.634285714286 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4597435312 44.8134815571 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4444444444 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4444444444 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 4.34317383033 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180154739523 0.216113520407 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744779892794 0.0766984524023 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0221971230078 0.0603063233224 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0933163601196 0.12726935374 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214326324925 0.0580467560999 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 8.37731958763 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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