You have a friend who lives in a city abroad.You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city.Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do. Tell him/her what type of work or studies you have bee

Essay topics:

You have a friend who lives in a city abroad.
You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city.
Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do. Tell him/her what type of work or studies you have been doing for the past few years and ask for assistance in contacting an appropriate institution.

Dear Jenny,

I’m so sorry that I haven’t kept in touch for a while. I’ve been busy recently.

I want to tell you my updated news! I considered whether I will go college or not. After I decided I chose one of college near your city. The college’s finance major are well-known in the field of the industry. I hope you can give me some useful tips.

The semester will start next July, and I want to explore before the class open. As I said, I’ve been quiet rough days, I needed to save money as much as I can. I did two part time jobs and apply scholarships for my making a living.

I hope you don’t ming doing this for me. It is much better a person who I know to get particular information instead of me.

Best regards,

Votes
Average: 3.3 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 84, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...dered whether I will go college or not. After I decided I chose one of college near y...
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Line 7, column 176, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... save money as much as I can. I did two part time jobs and apply scholarships for my maki...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 26.3917525773 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 633.0 937.175257732 68% => OK
No of words: 141.0 206.0 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48936170213 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.44591672665 3.78020617076 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5905074477 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 127.690721649 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.709219858156 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 194.4 290.88556701 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.2526880167 44.8134815571 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 57.5454545455 76.5299724578 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.8181818182 16.8248392259 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.36363636364 4.34317383033 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148741774494 0.216113520407 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521904658181 0.0766984524023 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660249005741 0.0603063233224 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0854633705628 0.12726935374 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0834168372584 0.0580467560999 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.1 8.37731958763 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.87 8.71597938144 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 41.2886597938 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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