You have recently bought a toy online and after receiving it you discovered a problem with it Write a letter to the online store you bought it from and say Describe the toy Explain the problem Suggest how it could be solved

Essay topics:

You have recently bought a toy online and after receiving it you discovered a problem with it. Write a letter to the online store you bought it from, and say

– Describe the toy.
– Explain the problem.
– Suggest how it could be solved.

Dear Sir / Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you about an issue with my recent purchase from your online store.

I purchased a life-sized 'Optimus Prime' action figure from your website for my son on 4th October 2018. The order number is ABC123. It was meant to be a gift for his upcoming birthday. However, when the package arrived, I was extremely disappointed since the toy showed signs of damage. Moreover, the toy seemed used and refurbished. I have always had a great experience visiting your store at City Park. Therefore, I wish to give your website another chance.

I expect you to kindly replace the doll with a brand new functioning model. If that is not possible, I would like to request a refund. You are welcome to call me for more details on my mobile number - 7717717717. Alternatively, you could also email me at sasuke0789@gmail.com. I hope to receive a prompt and favourable response.

Yours faithfully,
Sasuke Uchiha

Votes
Average: 9.1 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir / Madam, I am writing this letter to inform you a...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 794.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 162.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9012345679 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97980511921 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.746913580247 0.622605031667 120% => OK
syllable_count: 249.3 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 16.3608247423 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.6313648136 44.8134815571 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 56.7142857143 76.5299724578 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.5714285714 16.8248392259 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 4.34317383033 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216550747907 0.216113520407 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556184644677 0.0766984524023 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619528565256 0.0603063233224 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162464823064 0.12726935374 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0766875910208 0.0580467560999 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 8.37731958763 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 70.7449484536 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.96 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.4 8.54432989691 75% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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