You have recently bought a toy online and after receiving it you discovered a problem with it. Write a letter to the online store you bought it from and say:- Describe the toy- explain the problem- suggest how it could be solved

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You have recently bought a toy online and after receiving it you discovered a problem with it. Write a letter to the online store you bought it from and say:
- Describe the toy
- explain the problem
- suggest how it could be solved

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction with a toy that I earlier purchased through your online store on Amazon platform. The invoice reference is 1457895. The toy is an electronic red small car with a smart remote control for my young child and the catalogue number for this product is DFR14XT.

My child and I were really waiting this item for a very long time as the shipment was delayed from your side, however, when we ultimately received the post, we got shock since the remote control has been missed. Moreover, the surface of the car is scratched.

As the mistake was caused by your company, and according to the refund policy of your firm which gives me the right to return my money back if the product does not match the agreed deal, I hope that you will return all fees back and I will send you a picture of the posted box to be as a prove of this problem. You are kindly requested also to find out my bank account information in the attachment in order to transfer the fees back.

Finally, I would appreciate your immediate attention of this matter.

Best regards
Bilal

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter to express my d...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...gue number for this product is DFR14XT. My child and I were really waiting this ...
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Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...r, the surface of the car is scratched. As the mistake was caused by your compan...
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Line 7, column 287, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ou a picture of the posted box to be as a prove of this problem. You are kindly request...
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Line 7, column 436, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ent in order to transfer the fees back. Finally, I would appreciate your immedia...
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Line 9, column 70, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...our immediate attention of this matter. Best regards Bilal
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Line 11, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ention of this matter. Best regards Bilal
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, moreover, really, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 929.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 202.0 206.0 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59900990099 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46206887769 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643564356436 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 290.88556701 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.1832625608 44.8134815571 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.222222222 76.5299724578 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 16.8248392259 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 4.34317383033 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150085281903 0.216113520407 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455771388022 0.0766984524023 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536408009542 0.0603063233224 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0698941834628 0.12726935374 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581025365304 0.0580467560999 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 8.37731958763 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 8.71597938144 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.