You have recently started to work in a new company. Write a letter to a English speaking friend. In your letter Explain 1. Why you have changed 2. Describe your new job 3. tell your other news

Submitted by aneelamin on Thu, 05/03/2018 - 10:02

Hi Mark,

Hope this letter finds you well. Sorry for not writing for ages. I was very busy due to my office work and seem not got time for myself.

I am writing you to tell you about my new workplace. As you know, I had joined my previous workplace in tough circumstances so I was trying to switch since months and finally I got selected as Manager Databases at multinational company. My previous workplace was very stressful with full of problems and late sittings. As a part, it was less career oriented according to my qualifications and interests. Therefore, I was trying to seek a suitable opportunity, where I can showcase my skills.

Let me tell you about my new job. It is very challenging but quiet interesting. It is career oriented, lots of learning opportunities and have a vision. It also have good pay scale with interesting benefits including vacation packages, where employee can relieve all his tensions. I am responsible to manage all database servers running SQL Server instances. This will surely shape my career path.

I have one more good news for you. I am getting married in upcoming month and you have to attend it with your family. I will send you a card.

Best wishes,
John

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 154, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...arning opportunities and have a vision. It also have good pay scale with interesti...
^^
Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...pportunities and have a vision. It also have good pay scale with interesting benefit...
^^^^
Line 9, column 119, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...you have to attend it with your family. I will send you a card. Best wishes, ...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, therefore, well, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1006.0 937.175257732 107% => OK
No of words: 212.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74528301887 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8056166014 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627358490566 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 310.5 290.88556701 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 12.6804123711 142% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 16.3608247423 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6035913074 44.8134815571 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 55.8888888889 76.5299724578 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.7777777778 16.8248392259 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.94444444444 4.34317383033 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223851936591 0.216113520407 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695673866361 0.0766984524023 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081960627018 0.0603063233224 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141354051305 0.12726935374 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706482960028 0.0580467560999 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 8.37731958763 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 70.7449484536 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.38 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.4 8.54432989691 75% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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