You have seen an advertisement in an australian magazine for someone tolive with a family for six month and look after their six year old child.Explain why you would like the jobGive details of why you would be a suitable person to employSay how you would

Essay topics:

You have seen an advertisement in an australian magazine for someone tolive with a family for six month and look after their six year old child.

Explain why you would like the job

Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ

Say how you would spend your free time while you are in australia

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter in regard to The Morning Australia newspaper’s advertisement which you have published recently. I would like to announce you I am possible to take care of your 6 years old child, as you asked for a person to accommodate with your family for 3 months.

Let me explain you in detail. Lately, I have accepted in Sidney university which is near your house. Since, the cost of living in Sidney is staggering, I must find a job which make me to afford my cost. In addition, it will be an extra point for me to accommodate in your house to decline occupation’s cost.

furthermore, I have been trained for taking after children under 7 years old for two sequence years. I should mention that, I have been worked at a nursery for 1 year. furthermore, I have been worked in a volunteer in Chris Charity where locates in Green street for 2 months .

Besides that, I would considering to ask you about 1 day off-time for spending to my leisure activities. I mere participate in Tuesday classes, so, you can choose which day it would be possible for you for my free day. I really enjoy go swimming in my off-time. I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours Faithfully,

Chi Chung

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
...to decline occupation's cost. furthermore, I have been trained for taking after c...
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Line 13, column 169, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
...ve been worked at a nursery for 1 year. furthermore, I have been worked in a volunteer in C...
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Line 13, column 275, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ere locates in Green street for 2 months . Besides that, I would considering ...
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Line 17, column 23, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'considering asking'.
Suggestion: considering asking
...r 2 months . Besides that, I would considering to ask you about 1 day off-time for spending t...
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Line 17, column 23, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'consider'
Suggestion: consider
...r 2 months . Besides that, I would considering to ask you about 1 day off-time for spe...
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Line 17, column 263, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...eally enjoy go swimming in my off-time. I look forward to receiving your response...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, look, really, so, in addition, in regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1037.0 937.175257732 111% => OK
No of words: 221.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69230769231 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90811382944 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 314.1 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.13402061856 164% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4216479429 44.8134815571 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0714285714 76.5299724578 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7857142857 16.8248392259 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64285714286 4.34317383033 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348037682215 0.216113520407 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109966227121 0.0766984524023 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103691562674 0.0603063233224 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205180424983 0.12726935374 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0874410023134 0.0580467560999 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 8.37731958763 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 8.71597938144 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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