You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child Write a letter to the parents In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would

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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

explain why you would like the job
give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Rehana Diwan and I have been writing this letter in regards with recent advertisement published by you in Australian magazine for six months to take care six-year-old child.
Since 2010, I have been working as a child worker in India, with the time, I realized that spending time with kids is magnificent and may be world’s most enjoyable job. I not only feel rejuvenate but also it works as a depression buster for me. Moreover, I wanted to visit Australia for short time, so, it would be great for me to get this opportunity.
I assure you that I will be right match for this golden opportunity, because I work for my desire not only for money. Secondly, I have experience for more than ten years in this same. Even kids love to spend time with me. During this six months neither you will be worried for her food nor for her schooling. Lastly, I am well aware about children’s likes and dislikes. Hence, I will be perfect person.
I love to know more about Australian culture during my free time. Even I would spend my most of time in children play area such as garden and mall. So, I can broaden my horizons for child psychology.
Hope for positive response from you side. Eagerly waiting for your answer.
Yours faithfully,
Rehana Diwan

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 261, Rule ID: WORRY_FOR[1]
Message: The verb 'worry' does not normally take the preposition 'for'. Did you mean 'worried about'?
Suggestion: worried about
...ing this six months neither you will be worried for her food nor for her schooling Lastly I...
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Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...broaden my horizons for child psychology Hope for positive response from you side...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, lastly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1020.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 230.0 206.0 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4347826087 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37314846741 2.54303337028 93% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595652173913 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 327.6 290.88556701 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 12.6804123711 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 230.0 16.3608247423 1406% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 44.8134815571 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1020.0 76.5299724578 1333% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 230.0 16.8248392259 1367% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 80.0 4.34317383033 1842% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28171710863 0.216113520407 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.28171710863 0.0766984524023 367% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0603063233224 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173087502611 0.12726935374 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806032908399 0.0580467560999 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 114.4 8.37731958763 1366% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -145.05 70.7449484536 -205% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 3.82989690722 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 90.6 7.45979381443 1215% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 9.89 8.71597938144 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 18.13 7.59969072165 239% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 8.62886597938 637% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 94.0 8.54432989691 1100% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 94.0 8.15463917526 1153% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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