You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child Write a letter to the parents In your letter explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would

Essay topics:

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- explain why you would like the job.
- Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ.
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to the advert published in an Australian magazine for the need of a babysitter of six-year-old. Accordingly, I would like to apply for this temporary position.

As for the reason why I would like this job, I am currently looking for opportunities to do some voluntary work and doing so, in Australia would be a wonderful opportunity for me. Apart from this, I have previous experience of taking care of kids and spending time with them was very rewarding to me.

With regards to the details of being a suitable candidate for this position, I am really patient, tidy, reliable and hard-working, and I would be happy to give a reference of the family where I babysat. In addition to this, I have recently completed first-aid training and would be able to provide support in case of an emergency.

As far as spending my leisure time is concerned, I would learn and practice advanced English while living with native speakers like you. Another option, which I would consider while being in Australia is to join any sports club to keep myself upbeat and to widen my social circle by making new friends.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,
Ell

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, look, really, so, while, apart from, as for, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1016.0 937.175257732 108% => OK
No of words: 211.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81516587678 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78999228707 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611374407583 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 315.9 290.88556701 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.5229519409 44.8134815571 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.6 76.5299724578 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1 16.8248392259 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 4.34317383033 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330282802026 0.216113520407 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116171155452 0.0766984524023 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636956806331 0.0603063233224 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170870233563 0.12726935374 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604604532262 0.0580467560999 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 8.37731958763 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 8.71597938144 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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