You make many different flavours of ice cream in bulk. A small ice cream shop has written an email asking for you to supply them and if you offer a discount.
Write a reply email to them. You should decide on your level of formality, your subject line, and the language you wish to use to communicate your message. Write at least 160 words. (6 points).
Date: January 10th 2022
From: KemMeestore@gmail.com
To: ABC.icecreams@gmail.com
Dear Sir or Madam,
Thank you for showing interest in my product and your email requesting a discount to enable to you purchase my ice creams. KemMee store is a unit specializing in providing a large number of ice creams with many different flavours like chocolate, orange, vanillin, coffee, mango, apple, bean, strawberry and others. I had many years of experience, received the trust of customers and my store was certified for quality by the Institute of Hygiene Management. For new customers, I would supply over 70 ice creams with a variety of flavours to sell and experience. After that, you could decide whether or not to continue purchasing my product.
With regards to the price, you could find enclosed my most recent catalogue and price list. I reviewed your request for a discount on my product, but I regret to inform you that my budget doesn't allow discounts on the present price on my website. I anticipate that we can come to an agreement, which would suit my present budget. I am hoping that your ice cream shop may be my regular customer in the future and establish a long-term steady business relationship. However, I might have a plan to accept this end year discount request if your shop purchases annually.
If you have any questions or you would like to require any further information, please do not hesitate to contact me at 0973040177 or by emailing me at KemMeestore@gmail.com and I shall be more than willing to call you. I would be glad to assist you further. Please inform me of your decision by January 12th.
I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience. Have a wonderful day!
Yours faithfully,
Hong Hanh
Manger of Banh-Mee store
94 Vo Thi Sau, Truong Thi ward, Vinh city
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 173, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ore is a unit specializing in providing a large number of ice creams with many different flavours...
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Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...iding a large number of ice creams with many different flavours like chocolate, orange, vanill...
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Line 5, column 592, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...xperience. After that, you could decide whether or not to continue purchasing my product. Wit...
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Line 6, column 188, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...t I regret to inform you that my budget doesnt allow discounts on the present price on...
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Line 6, column 330, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nt, which would suit my present budget. I am hoping that your ice cream shop may ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 5.05154639175 238% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 32.9175257732 140% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 26.3917525773 159% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 937.175257732 162% => OK
No of words: 308.0 206.0 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91883116883 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 3.78020617076 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12572305685 2.54303337028 123% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 127.690721649 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62012987013 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 290.88556701 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.0319749984 44.8134815571 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 76.5299724578 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5333333333 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.8 4.34317383033 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.29896907216 209% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3253521937 0.216113520407 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10442267326 0.0766984524023 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526823825113 0.0603063233224 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878327885324 0.12726935374 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106038209969 0.0580467560999 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 8.37731958763 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 8.71597938144 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 41.2886597938 184% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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