You noticed a room at your company office that can be used as a relaxation room. Write a letter to your manager and ask to use it for this purpose.In your letter,•Explain why you suggest this.•Which room is it?•What changes will need to be done ther

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You noticed a room at your company office that can be used as a relaxation room. Write a letter to your manager and ask to use it for this purpose.
In your letter,
• Explain why you suggest this.
• Which room is it?
• What changes will need to be done there?

Dear Mr. Hieu,

My name is Truong Nguyen, who is working under your supervision. I have noticed that a particular room nearby the exit door is currently not in use. Therefore, I am writing this letter regarding my suggestion to turn the room into a relaxation division for the staffs.

Allow me to explain my idea. Lately, I have read an article on a science magazine that indicates 60 percent of employees are satisfied with relaxation rooms in their offices. Therefore, I think the staffs who are under your management will be much happier if you establish this room.

For the decoration, I suggest the tables and sofas should be neatly relocated to the walls which will make the center area more spacious if people want to sit or lie on the floor. Also, adding some beanbags would be nice for the relaxation. These are a few changes from my opinion, you can make a survey to ask for more interesting ideas from the others later.

I hope you will consider my suggestion.

Yours faithfully,
Truong Nguyen

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, so, therefore, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 848.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 177.0 206.0 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79096045198 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61674032909 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.683615819209 0.622605031667 110% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4880683172 44.8134815571 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.0909090909 76.5299724578 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0909090909 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 4.34317383033 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379346697144 0.216113520407 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119574508646 0.0766984524023 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799350129128 0.0603063233224 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191911489294 0.12726935374 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0782939495068 0.0580467560999 135% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 8.71597938144 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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