You recently read an article in a newspaper about someone you know personally. You found some information is wrong. Write a letter to inform him about it. Use the following points.1. What is the article about?2. What is the error?3. What you expect the ed

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You recently read an article in a newspaper about someone you know personally. You found some information is wrong. Write a letter to inform him about it. Use the following points.
1. What is the article about?
2. What is the error?
3. What you expect the editor to do?
Write not less than 150 words.

Dear Sir,

I am writing to let you know that the recent publication you did on Times Magazine concerning the biography of James Tabot had an error.

Let me explain the mistake in details. You wrote the biography of a famous musician and song writer James Tabot who was loved by both the old and the young but you omitted when he actually began his musical career. As you rightly published in the newspaper, he was born in Buea, 1965 and did his primary until university education in Yaounde where he obtained a bachelor degree in music and contemporary arts. You pointed out that he began his music career in 2015 but that is not correct as he actually started in 2012 and got a hit song in 2015.

Since your magazine is being read by a wide range of audience, could you please correct the date he actually began his music career while also mentioning when he became known worldwide. It would be ethical when the corrected version is published without any misleading information.

Thanks for your understanding.

Yours faithfully,

Martin Oben

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, so, while, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 881.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 183.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81420765027 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56960785515 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.639344262295 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.9652683537 44.8134815571 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8888888889 76.5299724578 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 16.8248392259 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 4.34317383033 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144923323264 0.216113520407 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566807056345 0.0766984524023 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068515886288 0.0603063233224 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0961638759478 0.12726935374 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0862741664403 0.0580467560999 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 8.37731958763 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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