You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Hi Rebecca,

I am writing to you in reply to your letter seeking suggestion about enrolling into the college or start a job. I will suggest you take up a job rather going to college and will provide you reasons supporting that.

Firstly, I will mention the disadvantages of going to college. I feel that you will not enjoy in Candian college, as you could only speak to the people who are of age the same as you. Most of the people of that age you have already seen in your high-school. Secondly, most of the students tend to enjoy the college rather focusing on studies and one of the reasons for this is; enrolling into the college is really tough, however, passing the college exams is not tough as compare to enrolling. The nearest best college is 40 Km far from your residence which will consume at least 2 hours in regular congestion. In addition to this, colleges fees are not cheap, you might have to apply for an educational loan.

Why Job is better than going to college? One who works get multidimensional growth as you will get to interact with multiple people from across domains. You will learn from the experiences of others and shall implement in your career also. Most importantly, you will earn and can manage your expensive moreover you can support your family also.

As you have several years of experience in customer handling then you can apply for a Receptionist Job in a company, school or in hotels.

All the best,
Dinesh

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 500, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'nearest the best'.
Suggestion: nearest the best
... not tough as compare to enrolling. The nearest best college is 40 Km far from your residenc...
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Line 7, column 235, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...hers and shall implement in your career also. Most importantly, you will earn and ca...
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Line 7, column 340, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ve moreover you can support your family also. As you have several years of experi...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, at least, i feel, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 4.92783505155 284% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1205.0 937.175257732 129% => OK
No of words: 259.0 206.0 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65250965251 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55258788176 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 127.690721649 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559845559846 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 368.1 290.88556701 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9014001719 44.8134815571 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0714285714 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 16.8248392259 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 4.34317383033 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313809913985 0.216113520407 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115758959799 0.0766984524023 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653963813683 0.0603063233224 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215817692441 0.12726935374 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427499330639 0.0580467560999 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 8.37731958763 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 8.71597938144 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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