You saw an advert in a newspaper asking for volunteers to help run a charity event write a letter of application to the organisers In your letter explain why you are interested in helping give details suitable past experience Suggest ways you might help t

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to submit my volunteers application to you, because of the advertisement I noticed in the newspaper about the the charity party for old people.
I am from the City University, as a student with three years of working experince in the NGO, I am an registered NGO volunteers in my hometown. I like to help people in need since I was at primary school when my mother always encouraged me to do so. This charity party attracted me since I am familiar with the whole process firstly. Moreover, I feel I am needed by the people here when I could work with you together.
Addtionaly, I can drive cars or vans for the party. If there is some work with poster design, I can help to do this as I am majoring in art design in our University.
Please view my resume in the attachment at your convenience. I am truthfully waiting for your correspondence.

Yours faithfully,
Tony

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this lette...
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...sement I noticed in the newspaper about the the charity party for old people. I am fro...
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...s of working experince in the NGO, I am an registered NGO volunteers in my hometow...
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...gistered NGO volunteers in my hometown. I like to help people in need since I was...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fully waiting for your correspondence. Yours faithfully, Tony
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, so, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 755.0 937.175257732 81% => OK
No of words: 167.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52095808383 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87963567562 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 127.690721649 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616766467066 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 243.0 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4582974832 44.8134815571 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.5 76.5299724578 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7 16.8248392259 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1674067471 0.216113520407 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621148268959 0.0766984524023 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530364108237 0.0603063233224 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109112766136 0.12726935374 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724786148678 0.0580467560999 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 8.37731958763 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 8.71597938144 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.