You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment in your letter.• Describe the problem with the equipment• Explain how this problem is affecting

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to let you know that the laptop I bought from your shop is not working properly. Let me explain the issue in detail, the laptop battery drains off very quickly. An entire fully charged battery discharges within 15 minutes of complete charge.

Let me explain, how this is affecting my work. I work from home and being a coder laptop is the most essential apparatus I need for my job. I always have to take charger along with me since the battery discharges quickly. Moreover, during power cut, I am not able to use the laptop for more than 15 minutes.

I want a properly functional laptop battery should be delivered to my location as soon as possible. I request your company to provide a proper battery this time which do not get damage within such shorter period of time. Moreover, since my laptop is within warranty, I expect this transaction should not charge any cost.

Thank you for your consideration.

Your's faithfully,
Sumit

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 250, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ges quickly. Moreover, during power cut, I am not able to use the laptop for more...
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Line 6, column 206, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...h do not get damage within such shorter period of time. Moreover, since my laptop is within w...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
moreover, so, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 810.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 171.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73684210526 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51578920181 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 127.690721649 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.649122807018 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 249.3 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.9952103324 44.8134815571 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.5 76.5299724578 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.25 16.8248392259 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.83333333333 4.34317383033 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176476127505 0.216113520407 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073899071745 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589859293562 0.0603063233224 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123519741695 0.12726935374 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543915571882 0.0580467560999 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 8.37731958763 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.62 8.71597938144 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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