You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment Explain how this problem is affecting your work Say what you want the shop or company to do

Essay topics:

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment

Explain how this problem is affecting your work

Say what you want the shop or company to do

Dear Manager,

I have recently purchased a cooling pad in your stores. I would like to bring forth to your notice a hazardous situation which I have experienced with your equipment.

Model Z 123 Cooling pad was working fine for the first two weeks. Suddenly, it started electrocuting me i.e. it is giving electric jolts to my palms while typing on my laptop when placed over it. I work from home online and after the beginning of this problem, I had to put a halt to my work as it could be fatal incase if these is a complete burnout of your electric accessory. On top of that, there is a chance that it could ruin my laptop. The crux of the problem here is that my life is in a grave danger if you can understand severity of this situation.

I’m pretty sure that the equipment is faulty and would recommend you to replace it immediately free of charge as my warranty still exists. I am strictly advising you to take this model out of circulation until the manufacturer modifies the product.

Regards,

Jack Dan

Votes
Average: 6.5 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 21, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'pad' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'pads'.
Suggestion: pads
...ur equipment. Model Z 123 Cooling pad was working fine for the first two week...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, still, while, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 853.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 186.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58602150538 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61493792188 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655913978495 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 264.6 290.88556701 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3203113707 44.8134815571 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3 76.5299724578 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 4.34317383033 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220171765433 0.216113520407 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0728136397694 0.0766984524023 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565661931527 0.0603063233224 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13995636502 0.12726935374 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191596254664 0.0580467560999 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 8.37731958763 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 8.71597938144 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.