you work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.Write a letter to your manager. In your letterExplain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six monthsSay how your wo

Dear Mr Louis,

Having worked under your supervision for more than 4 years, I have certainly learnt a great deal about our company and my roles as a product development team member. I am writing to show my appreciation and to seek your permission to work in our head office in Sydney, Australia.

Recently, I have come to know about a 6-month program, which is about to start in a few weeks at our company head office, focusing solely on “niche product development techniques” for new recruits. The program may have been designed for the new talents of our company, but I feel like a seasoned employee like me would also be able to benefit a lot from such initiative that doesn’t really come by every now and then.

I have already arranged for a couple of very talented interns to help our team. I have also requested other team members of my team to take the additional responsibilities in my absence, and they all agreed. Moreover, I will be able to communicate and help my team over the phone and emails whenever required.

Now, only if you are kind enough to take the lead in arranging a transfer to the head office by citing my reasons for it to the upper management, should I be able to join the program in due time.

Thank you for your help in advance.

Yours sincerely,

Gerd Müller

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 414, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
...iative that doesn't really come by every now and then. I have already arranged for a coupl...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1095.0 937.175257732 117% => OK
No of words: 235.0 206.0 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65957446809 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7664484016 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 127.690721649 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612765957447 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 342.9 290.88556701 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.457806163 44.8134815571 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.5 76.5299724578 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 16.8248392259 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 4.34317383033 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24199279691 0.216113520407 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106457375507 0.0766984524023 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732859967659 0.0603063233224 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146543502243 0.12726935374 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773247463066 0.0580467560999 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 8.37731958763 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.