you work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.Write a letter to your manger. In your letter* explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months* say how y

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you work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.
Write a letter to your manger. In your letter
* explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
* say how your work could be done while you are away
* ask for his/her help in arranging it

I am writing this letter to express my interest in the Newyork office administrator position of our company. Having heard about the recruitment of that vacancy in the company meeting last Saturday, i was really excited and thought that it must be a great opportunity for me to contribute my skills and knowledge to the company.
The reasons that i would like to apply for the position for 6 months are i have stayed there for 4 years when i studied in my university and i also have enough skill and experience to complete the given tasks. My greatest advantage is i can go anywhere in Newyork without a map because i was used to with all of the streets when i was there. Therefore that can be really convenient for me when i travel to or go on business trips. Additionally, i have worked for this similar position for 3 years; therefore i am quite confident that i can fulfill requirements
If i have a chance to work there, i would like to recommend Mr. Ben, for my current position during my working time aboard. He is a manager in the marketing department of our company. Before working for our company, he has already had some experiences relating to office in this previous job. I guarantee that he can do that very well.
Finally, I will really precious that if you allow me to off work 3 days before beginning the work in Newyork. I intend to visit some old friends near the new office.
I am looking forward to hearing from you!
Thank for your time. Let me know if you have any demand!
Best staff
Hung

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, look, really, so, therefore, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.03092783505 363% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 51.0 32.9175257732 155% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 26.3917525773 136% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1245.0 937.175257732 133% => OK
No of words: 277.0 206.0 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49458483755 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 3.78020617076 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6316476229 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 127.690721649 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570397111913 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 396.9 290.88556701 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.2588394138 44.8134815571 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7692307692 76.5299724578 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3076923077 16.8248392259 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 4.34317383033 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 2.54639175258 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246019988373 0.216113520407 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801414292531 0.0766984524023 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650721262989 0.0603063233224 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122072835976 0.12726935374 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381892422891 0.0580467560999 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 8.37731958763 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 70.7449484536 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 8.71597938144 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 41.2886597938 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 75.8426966292 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.75 Out of 9
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