You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods

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You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town.

Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inquire some information about a certain type of battary I would like to purchase for my laptop.

My laptop was not working since last week and I got it check by a friend. It turned out the battery of my laptop was broken, and the type of laptop is 2015 MacBook Air. I have been looking for the replacement near my home. But it seems that my local stores do not have any battery that is matched for this type. I am wondering if you have any in stock or could you please help me ordering it from the warehouse? Please let me know how much it cost and since I live in Ottawa I would only be able to drive there next month. How long will you hold this item for me?

I am looking for farward for your response.

Yours Sincerely,

Nick

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 381, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to order' or 'order'.
Suggestion: to order; order
...ny in stock or could you please help me ordering it from the warehouse? Please let me kn...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 26.3917525773 61% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 630.0 937.175257732 67% => OK
No of words: 152.0 206.0 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.14473684211 4.54256449028 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.12437867729 2.54303337028 84% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 127.690721649 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.644736842105 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 198.0 290.88556701 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3820310946 44.8134815571 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.0 76.5299724578 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2 16.8248392259 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.7 4.34317383033 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130909716839 0.216113520407 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523844458119 0.0766984524023 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625405148443 0.0603063233224 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0710278263151 0.12726935374 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564564771361 0.0580467560999 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.7 8.37731958763 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 70.7449484536 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.14 8.71597938144 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 7.59969072165 92% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 41.2886597938 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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