You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Essay topics:

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter with regard to the Seminar on "Banking on Biometrics" scheduled to be held in Sydney, Australia in January 2019. I have learned about this workshop by your advertisement in newspaper and as I am planing to attend in, I need some more detailed information.

I am IT manager in "Saman bank" in SHIRAZ, Iran, for almost three years and I think this seminar would be useful for me, as it covers recent development in electronic banking. I believe that the workshop would be a great opportunity to enhance the participant's knowledge and skills.

As I couldn't obtain the information that I needed from your advert, I would be appreciate if you could provide me some information about the date and duration of the seminar, besides the details of each sections in the workshop. Additionally I would be glad if you could inform me about the registration costs, and as I am travelling from Iran, I also need to know about the accommodation arrangement. Is there any living place for the participants coming from the other countries?

I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.

Your faithfully
Samine Joon

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Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...need some more detailed information. I am an IT manager in SAMAN bank in SHIRA...
^
Line 5, column 6, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
...some more detailed information. I am an IT manager in SAMAN bank in SHIRAZ, Iran f...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...cent development of electronic banking. I believe that the workshop would be a gr...
^
Line 5, column 284, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...participants knowledge and skills. As I couldnt obtain the information that I needed fr...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 507, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...tails of each sections in the workshop. Additionally I would be glad if you could inform me ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, look, so, i think, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.85567010309 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 982.0 937.175257732 105% => OK
No of words: 201.0 206.0 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8855721393 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07504545606 2.54303337028 121% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592039800995 0.622605031667 95% => OK
syllable_count: 305.1 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.5428121148 44.8134815571 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.111111111 76.5299724578 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 16.8248392259 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 4.34317383033 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203104030241 0.216113520407 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762487687607 0.0766984524023 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479821554547 0.0603063233224 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112829522386 0.12726935374 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661610524913 0.0580467560999 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 8.71597938144 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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