Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go Write a letter to the head teacher In your letter Say why you would like to go on the trip Suggest what

Dear Vasu,

I hope you are doing well. I know you are excited about our next meet-up. However, I won’t be able to join because I have to travel to India due to a family occasion. So, I’ll not come along with you for a movie on Friday.

It is necessary to attend the family function since it’s my cousin’s marriage. Also, I have to accompany my mother during the event. I forgot to tell you about this occasion due to a heavy work schedule.

Moreover, you can go with my college friend Lisa. She had bought two movie evening show tickets in advance for coming Friday. If you are comfortable going along with her, please let me know so that I can inform her in advance that you’ll be joining her on Friday for a movie.

You’ll be enjoying her company because you both are foodies and love to snooker after the movie at midnight club. Apart from that, you can go bowling before the movie since the bowling club is next to the cinema, I assure you that both of you will enjoy this bowling center in the town.

Looking forward to seeing you on my return.
Best regards,
Shwatank

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
...el to India due to a family occasion So Ill not come along with you for a movie on ...
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Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ary to attend the family function since its my cousins marriage Also I have to acco...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is occasion due to a heavy work schedule Moreover you can go with my college frie...
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Suggestion: Moreover,
...casion due to a heavy work schedule Moreover you can go with my college friend Lisa ...
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Suggestion: you'll
...o that I can inform her in advance that youll be joining her on Friday for a movie ...
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Suggestion:
...ull be joining her on Friday for a movie Youll be enjoying her company because yo...
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Suggestion: You'll
...e joining her on Friday for a movie Youll be enjoying her company because you bot...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...you on my return Best regards Shwatank
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, moreover, so, well, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 863.0 937.175257732 92% => OK
No of words: 202.0 206.0 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.27227722772 4.54256449028 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.01336700611 2.54303337028 79% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574257425743 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 277.2 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 12.6804123711 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 202.0 16.3608247423 1235% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 44.8134815571 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 863.0 76.5299724578 1128% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 202.0 16.8248392259 1201% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 55.0 4.34317383033 1266% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143799351152 0.216113520407 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143799351152 0.0766984524023 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0603063233224 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0787068027921 0.12726935374 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366103105053 0.0580467560999 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 99.7 8.37731958763 1190% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -116.63 70.7449484536 -165% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 3.82989690722 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 79.7 7.45979381443 1068% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 8.97 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 16.0 7.59969072165 211% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 8.62886597938 614% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 82.8 8.54432989691 969% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 53.0 8.15463917526 650% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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