Your family is going to move to another town Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests

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Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

Dear Principal,

I am Amelia Johnson,writing to request your advice on the admission of my son, mark. I have been recently transferred to San Diego, to oversee some projects at the headquarters on urgent basis. as a consequence, my son also needs to travel with me. I am fully aware that students are normally recommended to complete a whole academic year before switching schools but the changes were at the eleventh hour.

Your school has a reputation of upholding exceptionally high standards of education. My son has an excellent track record of passing all of his subjects with outstanding grades. I have provided a copy of his marksheets as attachment. In addition, he is active sports person at his current school and has been praised by his teachers for his performance. He had been recognised as man of the match in a recent inter-school cricket competition.

Therefore, I would be grateful if you could consider him for joining midsession. I can ensure you that he will bring the best culture and honour to the school.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,
Amelia Johnson

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , writing
Dear Principal, I am Amelia Johnson,writing to request your advice on the admission...
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Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...ts at the headquarters on urgent basis. as a consequence, my son also needs to tra...
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Line 3, column 294, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended completing'.
Suggestion: recommended completing
... fully aware that students are normally recommended to complete a whole academic year before switching ...
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Line 5, column 261, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...s attachment. In addition, he is active sports person at his current school and has be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, therefore, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 934.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 187.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99465240642 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03471106466 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.689839572193 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 281.7 290.88556701 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8208333318 44.8134815571 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.8461538462 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3846153846 16.8248392259 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61538461538 4.34317383033 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166454819567 0.216113520407 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551428634696 0.0766984524023 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405590870297 0.0603063233224 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0700191946756 0.12726935374 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545790269219 0.0580467560999 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 8.37731958763 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.07 8.71597938144 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 41.2886597938 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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