Due to large demand of energy sources such as oil and gas, should people be looking for sources of oil and gas in remote and untouched places? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of damaging such areas?
As the world population is booming, the need for non-renewable fossil fuels is increasing day-by-day. As a result, energy companies have started searching for fuels in unexplored parts of the earth such as Antarctica, since they have already utilised a sizeable amount of resources in many other places of the world where humans exist. However, in my opinion, even though there is a necessity to extract natural energy resources to contribute to the growing economy, there are detrimental effects which could affect human livelihood to a great extent.
At the outset, the benefits of tampering virgin lands are to be considered. Evidently, industrialisation and globalisation are the vital factors which favour and contribute to the betterment of sky-rocketing population. This is substantiated by the fact that digging of oil and gas in these remote areas would be essential for survival of humans on this planet in the long run. Besides, giant corporates make a huge revenue by handling and controlling this energy sector with the help of state-of-the-art technological advances.
Nevertheless, the dark side of vanishing such fresh, unexplored natural environment alarms ecologists and scientists. This can be seen from the fact that global warming poses a perennial threat to our mother nature, which is caused due to melting of glaciers in the Arctic regions because of disturbance made to ecosystem by oil firms in those areas. Therefore, there has been an ecological catastrophe which could turn our earth into a worst place to live in the near future.
To conclude, after analysing both pros and cons of destroying untouched natural places, it is true that the disadvantages far outbalance the advantages, hence I assert that it is time for humans to quit exploiting non-renewable energy resources and move towards alternative sources of energy.
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1. Sentence: Nevertheless,
1. Sentence: Nevertheless, the dark side of vanishing such fresh, unexplored natural environment alarms ecologists and scientists.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to alarms and ecologists
My opinion: As per the Oxford Dictionary, 'alarm' is also used as 'verb'. I here mentioned as 'verb'
2. Sentence: As a result, energy companies have started searching for fuels in unexplored parts of the earth such as Antarctica, since they have already utilised a sizeable amount of resources in many other places of the world where humans exist.
Error: sizeable Suggestion: sizable
My opinion: As per the Oxford Dictionary, 'sizeable' is the correct spelling.
3. Error: industrialisation Suggestion: industrialization
My opinion: Industrialisation is a British word and is correct.
4. Error: sky-rocketing Suggestion: sky rocking
My opinion: There is no word called 'sky rocking'. I can only see 'sky rocketing' in the Oxford dictionaries.
Finally, I apologize if I am wrong. Please answer my doubts, and please provide new band scores if there are any changes.
Thank you in advance!
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Yes, you are right. The e-rater is an 'American' grammar checker. You can ignore those message next time.
But the score is till 6.5 because of the total performance.
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paragraph 1: introduction. Your ideas/opinions here.
paragraph 2: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side A. First, ... Second, ...
paragraph 3: However, still I support side B. reason 1 + why reason 1 + example for reason 1 + a small conclusion for reason 1.
paragraph 4: reason 2 + why reason 2 + example for reason 2+ a small conclusion for reason 2.
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As the world population is booming
As the world's population is booming
would be essential for survival of humans
would be essential for the survival of humans
Sentence: Nevertheless, the dark side of vanishing such fresh, unexplored natural environment alarms ecologists and scientists.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to alarms and ecologists
Sentence: Therefore, there has been an ecological catastrophe which could turn our earth into a worst place to live in the near future.
Description: The token a is not usually followed by an adjective, superlative
Suggestion: Refer to a and worst
Sentence: As a result, energy companies have started searching for fuels in unexplored parts of the earth such as Antarctica, since they have already utilised a sizeable amount of resources in many other places of the world where humans exist.
Error: sizeable Suggestion: sizable
Sentence: Evidently, industrialisation and globalisation are the vital factors which favour and contribute to the betterment of sky-rocketing population.
Error: industrialisation Suggestion: industrialization
Error: sky-rocketing Suggestion: sky rocking
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 295 350
No. of Characters: 1529 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.144 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.183 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.004 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.142 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.588 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.021 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5