The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays the worldwide developed countries have to face the issue of obesity outbreak which is one of the biggest health problem in the world.
There are some studies made by the USA scientists which conclude that obesity lower the hope of life by 25%. I strongly agree that obesity is like a disease and the best way to avoid obesity is to prevent it by educating the population by working out. Nevertheless the health care system would be less struggled if the population from the community would be more conscious about the advantages of sport and physical exercises that people should do every day.
In my country for example, despite the lazyness of some students who don't accept to participate to the sport related classes, the new generation of students are more open minded when it comes about having sport activities and the availability of high quality sport equipment and variety of sport options is much higher than 10 years before and all these changes will guide the life of the citizens to a higher level and more people will be in to sports.
However there are more sports men and women examples who are made publicly by the media like Simona Halep and Marius Ionescu so these actions have a good contribution to the education of the population of my country. It have been proven in the least 10 years that school sport curriculum improved the life of the society but on the other hand the number of fast food restaurants increased, which is a major drawback for the health of the population.
All in all, even though there are some system weaknesses in education and the fast food restaurants are more popular, people from my country are becoming more conscious about the advantages of making sports and I totally agree that physical education is basically one of the most important subjects taught at school
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Present a written argument or ease to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic.
In some societies, stress is now regarded as a major problem, and it is thought that people suffer from more stress than they did in the past.
However, others feel that the amount of stress people have today is exaggerated. They say that previous generations were under more pressure, but the idea of suffering from stress did not exist.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.Write at least 250 words.
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These days, Stress, has become a hot topic to discuss. It has been seen very commonly in this modern era. Most of the people thought that mental illness is a major problem now a days than our ancestors. Although it has also been thought by many that stress, anxiety and depression was more common than these days. But I strongly believe that, New generation has become a victim of depression and anxiety, definitely stress. In this essay, I will enlighten both views in depth.
On one hand, stress and mental illness have become a common issue these days. In new generation this is common because the anxiety of getting admissions, Job and bright future. In a competitive world, after a job fear of losing and getting high post ,excel and have to late seating in the offices. Even most of the times they don’t have time for themselves. They have strong desire to achieve and in the last they get nothing .This cause a major stress in this modern and competitive era. Social media, is an open air, sweat has spoil the nation. They don’t have time for their love once. That is the main reason of mental illness.
On the other hand, In the past days stress and anxiety were because of poor living life style. They don’t have facility of health care service, which is very important. They don’t have the sense to get their yearly or quarterly checkup. In other words, we can say they don’t have the resources. In the past many don’t have modern kitchen appliances or equipments . So, they have to pass major part of the day in the chores similarly in the offices lack of electrical instrument people had to suffer with lots of work pressure. They don’t have any activity to fresh their minds time and money as well. Finally, it caused the deep depression or stress.
In conclusion, People suffer stress and depression immensely in both era differently. but I firmly believe that people have to face immense pressure in this modern competitive age.
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