The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life
These days, career becomes an important thing that differs among societies. It is become part of our daily lives that run countries around the world as we live today. A career born from the necessity to fulfill the society’s need and will continues in the future. Having a single career, however, is becoming an old fashioned as a world we know has changes and develops over the time demanding people to learn more and hold more than a single career so they can improve their welfare as well as achieving a stable life with the increasing of life cost. Furthermore, to reach further education, the people will have a better future for their life and better quality life.
First of all, we know that our world, as far as we know, reap the benefit of technological development which can help people to improve the way they conduct their business effectively as well as make their lives easier. For instances, internet may open a whole new possibilities provided to many people for conducting business as well as create one whether it is primary job or side job. However, the idea of having a single career even can help people to be more focus on what their want to do with their own desire, may not suffice to help them hold their own life as an increasing of standard life cost and demand for the capability of handling another job adapting these change.
Secondly, to reach further education will help people to improve their quality and better yet, their own futures. As we all know, many achievement have been made by the people who always keenly pursuing further education and improved their knowledge to help them solving their problems in their careers. This evidence is enough to tell you that education will always continue throughout life.
To sum up, having several career may become a popular choice to help them improving their lives of earning money and pursuing further education will help them improving their careers.
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It is become part of our daily lives
It has become the part of our daily lives
A career born from the necessity
A career is born from the necessity
and will continues in the future.
and will continue in the future.
has changes and develops over the time
has changed and developed over the time
many achievement have been made
many achievements have been made
Sentence: However, the idea of having a single career even can help people to be more focus on what their want to do with their own desire, may not suffice to help them hold their own life as an increasing of standard life cost and demand for the capability of handling another job adapting these change.
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