When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.
Become a big country having smart technology is one of some desire which owned by nation in the world. Actually, in this time technology being developed by some government create few problem in them, there are opinion from several citizens that negative impact through ever greater technology result dissipation complexion of traditional which is threatened its existence, even though in part of society requirement rely modern way to produce wide range of things today, in this essay I will describe my own opinion about the topic.
Firstly, I think that it is normal when a country is ameliorating and its habitual ways of life are being changed to new technologies and actually almost of crucial sector in a nation involve blend which is better between technology and national necessity. For example, in military sector already become a compulsion in some countries of which strong infrastructure and always develop their civil defense with utilize technology as purpose to anticipation interference from another country.
As matter of fact result from exploit technology for some sector in nation carry out solemn threat against traditional skills and there are some opinion that technology advancement having boulder into local capability in mostly countries nowadays. In addition, there are many society becoming victim from progress technology because the real impact which felt by citizen especially old age hardly to be adapt with new technology that is caused by some factor.
In conclusion base on above opinion basically Government become the hero role to overcome problem between new technology and local ability in society on some countries. The Government should save their society who is weak about new technology, further, the citizen also must effort to adapt with different condition now, in order to still alive even though time keep on running.
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Become a big country having smart technology is one of some desire which owned by nation in the world.
Becoming a big country having smart technology is one of some desires which are owned by nations in the world.
Actually, in this time technology being developed by some government create few problem in them, there are opinion from several citizens that negative impact through ever greater technology result dissipation complexion of traditional which is threatened its existence,
Description: can you re-write this sentence? a lot of errors
requirement rely modern way to produce wide range of things
requirement relies modern ways to produce a wide range of things
in military sector already become a compulsion
the military sector already becomes a compulsion
Sentence: As matter of fact result from exploit technology for some sector in nation carry out solemn threat against traditional skills and there are some opinion that technology advancement having boulder into local capability in mostly countries nowadays.
Description: The fragment nation carry out is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace carry with verb, past tense
Description: The fragment in mostly countries is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace mostly with adjective
In conclusion base on above opinion basically Government become the hero role
In conclusion based on above opinions basically Government becomes the hero role
Sentence: The Government should save their society who is weak about new technology, further, the citizen also must effort to adapt with different condition now, in order to still alive even though time keep on running.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to must and effort
Description: The fragment time keep on is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace keep with verb, past participle
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
Read a good grammar book. You have serious issues on sentences structure.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 4.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 295 350
No. of Characters: 1550 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.144 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.254 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.669 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.252 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.471 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.735 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.151 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5