30. In many countries art galleries visitors have been declining steadily. What are the possible reasons? How to change this trend.
A generation ago, people visited art galleries as a popular hobby.However, in this contemporary society, there is a significant decline in the number of travellers visiting art museums.Although there are many factors which invoke this recent trend, I still believe measurements can be adopted to positively alter this issue.
On the other hand, there are a number of potential reasons that cause the decline of the visitors . To begin with, it is the developing society nowadays that people are tempted by the emergence of new entertaining facilities.In addition, such a fascinating destination like shopping mall or cinema is more captivating to youngsters compared to historical art galleries , leading not only to a sharp drop of visitors in museums but also the disappearance of these ancient places. Moreover, art is not exclusive any longer. In the past, artists needed galleries to display their paintings. However, thanks to the breakthrough of technology, it is no longer necessary to publish objects in a conventional way anymore. For instance, so convenient is the media platform such as Facebook or Instagram that many modern artists choose to display their work on.
On the other hand, I believe it is high time that people adopt timely measurements to tackle these problems described above. Firstly, government should allocate more expenditure for the renovation of outdated art galleries. In addition, the more attractive the physical appearance of exhibitions are, the more the visitors will visit, positively inscreasing the number of travellers on a large scale. Moreover, campaigns which enhance the awareness of people on coming to art galleries are also an effective way. For instance, the national Art Museum in HCM city has recently experienced a massive number of daily visiotrs thanks to the excessive array of adverts
Taking everything into considerations due to the alteration of modern society, art galleries are fogrgot by the majority of citizens. In order to transform this issue, the expenditure for reservation and campaings should be adopted as soon as possible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, still, for instance, in addition, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38601823708 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13401846239 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568389057751 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.2770315535 49.4020404114 201% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 136.307692308 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3076923077 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92307692308 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187214090909 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610937176149 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534877163957 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116753213898 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502022302467 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 9.78957915832 215% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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