Advertisement has a negative influence on children behaviour. What are the main effects?

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Advertisement has a negative influence on children behaviour. What are the main effects?

Currently, advertisement have predominately a negative influence on children lives and character. In my personal view the government should restrict all advertisement on children's TV programs. Commercials usually tend to be unrealistic and give a false impression of how the children buy the product. This essay will discuss the major effect and negatives of advertisement. Every individual has own unique attitude towards advertisement and the advantages and disadvantages that advertising brings. I tend to think that government should allow an educational ads and reports. Furthermore, children's physical environment and attitude will expand into a good condition and knowledge. Moreover, all TV media is controlled in some way by the government which prevents advertisement from having inappropriate content. On the other hand, numerous thing should not be advertised, such as cigarettes, alcohols which are harmful to children's and adults health. Children, especially, should not be shown ads that more adjusted things look attractive or interesting. To sum up,the government should restrict some limits on children's TV programs, just because it will be effect on their bright and shining future.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ect on their bright and shining future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, look, moreover, so, such as, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 41.998997996 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1024.0 1615.20841683 63% => OK
No of words: 178.0 315.596192385 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.75280898876 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 4.20363070211 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29548857054 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 176.041082164 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.674157303371 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 308.7 506.74238477 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.8125672194 49.4020404114 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.0909090909 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1818181818 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239206766829 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094403656315 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787768596052 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239206766829 0.151304729494 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.77 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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