Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
In recent years, people tend to switch the way they work from going to the office to stay at home and finish their workload online, while for children, they also experience online classes thanks to the cheap price and accessibility of technology. In my opinion, the negative effect of this trend definitely outweighs the positive ones. To elaborate my idea, I would like to have a further discussion in the articles below.
At first, because of the advance in modern technology, residents nowadays often prefer working and studying via Internet platform to being in the offices or classes. In fact, there are some advantages concerning this issue since the flexibility of such convenience would give people more time to do their own business or even take care of themselves. Furthermore, they could spend more time with their family and minimize the risk of being late for their work or study.
In contrast, the disadvantage is beyond the optimistic outcome. If human gradually overuses online platform, although for working and studying, it may cause some bad effect on their mental and physical health, such as: depression, obesity, diabetes or even shortsighted. According to VnExpress report in 2021, 40% of adults answered that they suffered from stress and some sickness relating too their eyesight as they use technology devices more than 3 hours per day.
In conclusion, in spite of giving us so many benefits, technology has its own limits, therefore, instead of staying at home, going to the workplace or school seems to be a better solution, not only to improve ones' health, but also develop the connection between human in a community.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 210, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... a better solution, not only to improve ones health, but also develop the connection...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, such as, in my opinion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09191176471 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71324276661 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.669117647059 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.4611402152 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.5 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.4 7.06120827912 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225178003974 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705137433944 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437872153317 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118427104759 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191150257883 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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