Arts is important form of expression for individual and culture of society. should children be taught arts in school in your opinion. is it important for children to focus on arts rather than other subjects
Arts is a creative way of expressing oneself. It forms a significant part of society by depicting its culture. I believe it is extremely important for children to learn arts as it helps them in describing their inner feelings or emotions and also to develop fine motor and social skills. However, I do not think that children should be allowed to direct their attention to arts alone instead of other academic subjects.
Arts for children is not only entertaining but also a way of expressing themselves. Sometimes young students may not be able to describe what they feel through words or actions but may be able to draw or paint their emotions, whether happy, sad or worried. In this way they may be able to communicate their thoughts to the adults, which is i feel an essential social skill. In addition to this, children learn fine motor skills while drawing delicate details or handling scissors and paint brushes. This improves their hand eye coordination which is a useful skill and if carried into adult life is helpful in performing jobs like construction, engineering and also surgeries. Hence, arts is essential for developing a child's social and physical skills.
Despite these advantages, I feel that arts should be an additional/optional subject for students specially after primary education. This is because many children may not be motivated to carry on with these classes due to increasing pressures from other academically challenging subjects such as maths or science. As children are inclined to make a career by performing well in these subjects they may not want to distract themselves with subjects such as arts which has a comparatively low professional success ratio. Therefore, only students who are passionate about pursuing arts as a career should be allowed to continue this subject in high school.
In conclusion, although I am of the opinion that young children should be taught arts to develop their creative ideas, communication and motor skills, only students wishing to make arts as a profession should focus on this subject rather than other subjects.
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Essay evaluation report
as it helps them in describing their inner feelings or emotions and also to develop fine motor and social skills.
as it helps them in describing their inner feelings or emotions and also develops fine motor and social skills. //parallel
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flaws:
There are a lot of duplicated content, for example:
I believe it is extremely important for children
However, I do not think that ...
which is i feel an essential social skill.
I feel that arts should be an additional/optional subject
although I am of the opinion that
those 'I think/feel/am of the opinion' can be removed.
also see the word 'skills/skill', they are a lot:
also to develop fine motor and social skills
i feel an essential social skill.
In addition to this, children learn fine motor skills
eye coordination which is a useful skills
a child's social and physical skill.
creative ideas, communication and motor skills
one word can appear one time or maximum two times in one essay.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 344 350
No. of Characters: 1716 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.307 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.988 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.741 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.227 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.867 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.526 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
But the essay asks my opinion
But the essay asks my opinion so if I don’t state those words ( feel believe) etc I score low on task response ?
No, you never score low
No, you never score low because you don't use those words. Maybe one time is enough.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... their thoughts to the adults, which is i feel an essential social skill. In addi...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to fine'
Suggestion: to fine
...ll. In addition to this, children learn fine motor skills while drawing delicate det...
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Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...coordination which is a useful skill and if carried into adult life is helpful in...
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Line 3, column 611, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...if carried into adult life is helpful in performing jobs like construction, engin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1166180758 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90054498032 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530612244898 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 528.3 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7305421949 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8666666667 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13333333333 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394554593399 0.244688304435 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141137588899 0.084324248473 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988804773422 0.0667982634062 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269089057491 0.151304729494 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785286143142 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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