Sports is an activity in which most children participate these days. While some like to pursue it as a major interest others play sports just as a hobby. In my opinion, playing sports seriously is a positive development, because sports not only teaches children discipline but also to focus on achieving their goals irrespective of their failures or shortcomings.
It is well known that children who participate in sports activities from early age tend to be more disciplined and organised. It is instilled in them to be on time and to be well trained beforehand. These qualities are not only crucial in sports but are also important life skills. For instance, my cousin who is an accomplished tennis player is well appreciated by his family and colleagues for being punctual and well organised. This shows the positive influence sports can have on a person. Also, sports helps in maintaining fitness in youngsters. Instead of spending free time on TV or internet, sports is definitely a healthier alternative. In addition to this, many universities offer scholarships to youngsters who are talented in sports which in turn is beneficial for their career.
Moreover, young people playing sports are trained to conquer their target/goal. They are better equipped to overcome failures as compared to their counter parts due to this quality. The "never say die"attitude helps them flourish even in their future lives. An example of this can be seen in many sports persons who, despite their failures in the field of sports, are successful businessmen. This proves that sports is of prime importance for the developing a strong and independent character.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that children should pursue sports not only in their leisure time but seriously so that it helps them grow into successful individuals. Schools and universities should provide facilities for these children to encourage them in taking part in sports.
Essay evaluation report
sports not only teaches children discipline but also to focus on achieving their goals
sports not only teaches children discipline but also focuses on achieving their goals //parallel
These qualities are not only crucial in sports but are also important life skills.
These qualities are not only crucial in sports but also important in life skills.
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flaws:
1. the essay is not exactly right on the topic. The topic didn't ask you make a choice, like: which is better:
take sports seriously ? or play sports in their free time?
but ask:
Some children nowadays take sports seriously while others play sports in their free time. Is this a positive or negative development?
so if you answer: yes, it is a positive development, then need to give some good reasons for both seriously and in free time. like this essay did:
https://www.testbig.com/ielts-writing-task-ii-essays/some-children-nowa…
not just for seriously.
2. another serious issue of this essay is that you repeat same words/phrases, like:
'not only...but also ....' repeated three times:
sports not only teaches children discipline but also to focus on achieving their goals
These qualities are not only crucial in sports but are also important life skills.
children should pursue sports not only in their leisure time but seriously
and you didn't use them correctly.
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T0 get 7.0, first, need to write the essay right on the topic, second, need more unique words, look, Unique words percentage is lower than the average:
Unique words percentage: 0.548076923077 0.561755894193 98% => OK
you may put less content like: 280 words in next essays.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 315 350
No. of Characters: 1586 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.213 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.035 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.793 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.965 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.497 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 188, Rule ID: BEFORE_HAND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'beforehand'?
Suggestion: beforehand
...em to be on time and to be well trained before hand. These qualities are not only crucial i...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, still, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22756410256 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98277262424 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548076923077 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.544357029 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6111111111 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366300075216 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1169342307 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710169846759 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230194490996 0.151304729494 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0808429672367 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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