The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009 The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants

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The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants

Given are the bar chart contrasting the figure of people attend different kinds of classes, namely drama, painting, sculpture and language as well as the pie chart delineating the proportion of citizens in terms of ages studying.
Perceptibly, the number of female learners was much more higher compared with men in drama, painting and language except for sculpture. Moreover, the older participated in class, the more crowded the class got.
In terms of female learners, there were remarkable attendances in most of the classes. To be more accurate, The men attending drama and language classes were just in halved compared to women with 10 and 20 respectively while the opposite was true for students in sculpture class. Lastly, female learners in painting were 5 greater than men.
When it comes to the rate of people in different age groups, the oldest group share a reversive pattern to the teenagers with 42% and 5% respectively. Finally, the people in their forties in terms of rate were less than 1% the combination of the 20 to 29-year-olds and the 30 to 39-year-olds.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
Given are the bar chart contrasting the figure of...
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Line 2, column 53, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'higher' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: higher
... the number of female learners was much more higher compared with men in drama, painting an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, lastly, moreover, well, while, except for, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 2.0 24.0651302605 8% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 901.0 1615.20841683 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 180.0 315.596192385 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00555555556 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 4.20363070211 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83319716448 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 176.041082164 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 270.9 506.74238477 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8542101848 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.625 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13301772143 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538051913706 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043391993819 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0824727688108 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486645424733 0.056905535591 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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