There is no doubt that many young people are becoming victim of a wide
of pressures from academic, social, and commercial perspectives, especially
children. From my point of view, this situation is caused by many both
subjective and objective reasons and I recommend for some reasonable
solutions to disentangle this problem.
It is the fact that almost parents believe that children are the future of the
world so they have to have the best grades and the best job. I believe that the
most important reason for that situation is the burden of academics. Parents
always have over-expectations for their kids, insist them to get good grades,
outstanding knowledge. In the current moment, nearly all organizations and
companies all over the world require their worker need to have qualifications
pours into the parents’ minds a thought that their children have to be successful
at school. That is why nowadays some teenagers take studying as a duty, not
interested in research. In addition, a variety of children become a famous star
from a young age and it is mostly the wish of parents so adults decided the future of
their children. The appearance of the media may deprive the young
generation’s childhood and kids can be affected by commercial perspectives.
In order to resolve children’s pressures from academic, social, and
commercial perspectives, many acceptable keys must be used. Parents need to
draw a line on their expectations and the future of their children. The adults have
to make a plan that kids can balance learning with relaxation. The biggest onus
is on schools and the teachers. Teachers should not pressurize children to learn
everything, to win at all coast and need to make school be a place to learn in a fun
way. Parents and teachers must allow kids to follow their dream to be a soccer
player, an actor, a singer, etc. it turns to make children grow psychologically
and physically.
To sum up, almost all children all over the world are being affected by
negative external factors. Parents and teachers at school need to join hands to
repel the pressures that negatively affect the development of children with the
most appropriate measures.
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- Children are facing more pressure nowadays from academic social and commercial perspectives What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a fun way" with adverb for "fun"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, in addition, no doubt, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1868.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14600550964 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93686135639 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506887052342 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 551.7 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1383433463 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.777777778 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 7.06120827912 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 29.0 4.38176352705 662% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174873509867 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577184727151 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648718520723 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0522635343105 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075010864111 0.056905535591 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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