Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more traditional past times than spending all day indoors Do you agree or disagree with the statement Wr

It is unequivocal that children are bearing the over-dependence on computers and digital recreation; thus an idea is came up with that children should put most of their time into going in for outdoor and more conventional activities. From my perspective, I am firmly of this opinion in light of opportunities opening for children's all-round development as well as safety from health risks.

To commence, getting involved in bricks-and-mortar activities facilitates boosting children's skills, contributing to the overall development of them. Obviously, going outside for face-to-face interactions is of help to them in terms of exchanging horizons, which does not merely forms lasting bonds that are of paramount importance to their success in the future but also assists them to hone their communication skills. Vietnamese students greatly exemplifies how considerable the benefits of interpersonal conversations are. Yearning for a brilliant career, Vietnamese students have the tendency to pick up soft skills, including communication skills on account of the fact that immesurable knowledge can be transmitted through exclammation. In other words, parents should foster offsprings to join in outside activities properly.
Last but not least, physical activities are of more significance compared to online ones with regard to preventing adverse health diseases from attacking themselves. According to recent research, sitting in front of the computer screen for hours can lead to numerous illnesses by dint of overmuch exposure to radioactivity. Therefore, immersing themsleves into physical activities is a preferable option for relaxing in lieu of on-screen ones. For example, a host of families in Viet Nam share that their children come down with severe diseases such as obesity as a consequence of lacking movement to play online games.

All in all, it is true that young generations are alarmingly overreliant on computers and online recreations and I am convinced that it is ultimately advantageous to childern when adopting outdoor and long-standing activities. I hope that parents would instill the position of these activities into their offsprings.

Votes
Average: 9.5 (2 votes)

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...these activities into their offsprings.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, such as, as well as, in other words, it is true, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67692307692 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32093948353 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621538461538 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.4091825855 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.923076923 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.61538461538 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169894980396 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508820907044 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03311098904 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0952193283316 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291545582773 0.056905535591 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.96 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.12 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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