Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amount of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought by wealthy parents

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Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amount of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought by wealthy parents

There is a thought that children who were grown by wealthy families have higher odds to be success in life. However, this is not always true as kids from poor families used to deal with the problems of adult life. They get job earlier, help parents more and have independent ideas. Even if they can’t get the higher education, these people have higher creativity and desirability for money. This essay will discuss whether these children are more prepared for adults life or not.

Firstly, by supporting parents kids become to get responsibilities which is more seen in poor families. This is a necessity in adult’s life. Being used to manage yourself from childhood you can easily make plans, wake up early and never be late. Even if this person got struggled with some life problem, he could with no doubt dig himself out of the mess. This is because his life is perfectly structured. Furthermore, poor kids have higher desirability for money than wealth ones. For example, football and basketball players brought up in poor conditions motivated themselves from day to day in order to get better life. Motivation is indispensably for dealing with troubles, while laziness will destroy everything.

Secondly, this isn’t always true because kids in wealth families get more attention and sensitiveness from parents. They are also provided with better education which is necessary for adult’s life as well. Nowadays, after studying in universities which require large amount of money undergraduates have high chances to get good jobs with high salaries. So, they have higher stability in their career, so they don’t struggle a lot with life problems.

Taking into consideration all mentioned above, children which are brought up in less wealthy families have higher motivation and get used to responsibilities. These help them to deal with problems. In the same way kids that have richer parents get better education and have a stable career which guarantees them less troubles in adults’ life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 313, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun troubles is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e a stable career which guarantees them less troubles in adults’ life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, no doubt, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18098159509 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74041773179 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549079754601 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1802275459 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.45 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366199951121 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106548008543 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619010661747 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233714608364 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539012347872 0.056905535591 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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