In class, you have been discussing the statement ‘Old people should be looked after by members of their family or it is better for them to live in nursing-home’. Your teacher has asked you to write an essay expressing your own opinion. Write your essay in 250-300 words.
These days, it is more common to witness the conspicuous high tendency of the elderly people, moving to the nursing house to dwell for the rest of their life. Some people advocate this phenomenon, others, are opposed to, stand a position that their descendants must take charge of their parents as an indication of gratitude and moral. I totally subscribe to the later view due to these two following evidences.
Firstly, there is no point in denying that when one becomes older, they would more likely acquire the affectionate and respectful care of their children by virtue of being more vulnerable and emotional in terms of physical and psychological health. The nursing house, although constitutes the excellent place to live, supplying the elders the creature comfort accompanied with the-state-to-date appliances and dedicated nurses, sometimes could not cater for them the family’s intimacy or worse, impinge excessively upon the old people, exerting them to fall in the ingrained and irreversible feeling of isolation and dereliction because they fell being betrayed by their beloved when being sent there. Moreover, when living in the brand-new environment, it would open up the possibility of the elderly people, encountering some adversities in terms of making acquaintances, being lack of intimate care and so forth. Furthermore, due to the weak body resistance, most of them are predominantly susceptible with some common diseases such as high blood pressure, diabetes, influenza or even depressive disorder, which from time to time are mainly in need of family’s care to recuperate rather than just simple nursery assistance.
Secondly, it should be born in mind that the elderly care is also correlation with the youngster’s ethics in society. The young people were undoubtedly instructed at school to usually hold the gratitude to their predecessors for what they have done for the following generations, and parents are those who had to confront with an inordinate number of hardship and tolerance when having brought them up. Not only do they must realise their parents' sacrifice but they also have a mandatory responsibility to compensate those by taking care of their parents when they get older. It is unarguable that after the long-lasting and hazardous life, the parents deserved the right to live with their children, seeing their grandchildren growing up as the consolation of old age. However, the parents certainly do not enforce their children to care for them but if they were abandoned desperately straight away by their children, the effect of this would possibly cause an embedded hurt in their heart, some even considered suicide as an escape. Ultimately, the action of sending parents to aged home deliberately or accidentally prevail and remould the awareness of the future’s generation about remembrance of the ancestor and lead them to forget the moral value of the society.
From what has been discussed above, we draw the conclusion that although the nursery house is applied with modern furniture to satisfy the material need of the old people, it is incapable of taking place one family’s house and giving them the genuine love and care. The young people must perceive their obligation and happily do it as the denotation of their gratitude for their parents' contribution to their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 41.998997996 179% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2822.0 1615.20841683 175% => OK
No of words: 534.0 315.596192385 169% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28464419476 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.20363070211 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97243339606 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 176.041082164 162% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533707865169 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 893.7 506.74238477 176% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 35.0 20.2975951904 172% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.2761010698 49.4020404114 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 188.133333333 106.682146367 176% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.6 20.7667163134 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53333333333 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190063415185 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675487379076 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337571865915 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120505488126 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296889451518 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.2 13.0946893788 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.49 50.2224549098 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 11.3001002004 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 78.4519038076 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.1190380762 158% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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