In countries where unemployment is high, education should only be obligatory up to primary school and not secondary school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The availability of job opportunities has played an important role in many countries education systems. while in many nations with high unemployment rate it is mostly encouraged to set the mandatory schooling up to primary level, other nations see that it must be necessary up to high school. In the following article both sides will be discussed and I will show why I strongly agree with second side of views.
To begin with, in modern systems education is the key for better jobs, it is hardly deniable to regret that in developed countries which are having strict rules about secondary education, are having higher job opportunities. For instance, according to statistics Qatar is having one of the best education systems with high graduation rate in the world, they are one of the countries with great job market too. moreover, nations with higher education strictness means that the people of these countries are more willing to develop their nations and more willing to give for charity, for example, it has been reported that while Canadians are one of the most well giving nations, they are having a strict legalization towards secondary schooling.
On the other hand, in territories with tight codes for higher education it is noticeable that they are suffering from unemployment, which leads their people to commit crimes. For example, India is struggling with high crime ratio, meanwhile their education system is not strict towards their secondary school rules, moreover, it is a country of one with lowest job opportunities in the world. Furthermore, low level education might drive people to not appreciate the importance of manpower, which result in lower wages for those who are even working due to their lack of knowledge.
In conclusion, while primary school is not enough, secondary schooling is a key role for both the people and job market.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, moreover, second, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17973856209 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7447342585 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509803921569 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.6073109006 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.5 106.682146367 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8 7.06120827912 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204415731898 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946115790485 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759947353753 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15475627745 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683167935072 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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