It is sometimes argued that famous people have a high income compared to other jobs, and the community believes they are overpaid for what they deserve. Especially in today’s society, when so many forms of entertainment appear all over the world that makes these jobs saturated steadily. But from my perspective, I totally disagree with this statement, and I will explain my ideas in this essay.
Becoming a celebrity is not as easy as people have thought, they spent a large amount of time and effort to climb up to that mountain of success. In other words, They have to practice a variety of skills such as acting, singing, dancing, etc. Although most of them might be born with gifted talent or skills, they only achieve a certain level without restrictive practice. If they can not exploit and improve themselves more and more, this competitive industry will eliminate them rapidly. For example, most singers in South Korea, or usually called K-Pop idols, have to be trainees for a long time, can be up to 10 years to become a pop star. Like Moon Sua’s case, she has beeneven traininged for 12 years for her debut. Obviously, reserving a debut is not uncomplicated at all. They struggle and compete a lot, against thousands of others, to survive in this tough industry. Through live show records, we can see how much difficulty they have experienced to debut and become famous. Therefore, I think that the high salaries celebrities earn are worth to their attempt.
Furthermore, even if they are famous and gain a big influence, they have to bear the pressure of the public as a big price. Celebrities almost do not have any privacy, when paparazzi and crazy fans stalk them everywhere. Usually, the bad news is an attractive deal with paparazzi, which is why these people fake the truth and write news that smears celebrities, just because they want to increase revenue for themselves. And that leads to the tidal criticism of the public and netizens., They hurly insult celebrities without considering anything, as they just want to believe what they believe and satisfy their need. Steadily, celebrities become depressed, which leads to self-harm, or even worse is suicide. As in the case of Sulli - a talented idol of SM Entertainment, left the world because of cyberbullying. That is how public pressure buries an innocent life.
In conclusion, celebrities have to trade their free life, physical and mental health as a price for fame. That is the reason why they have high salaries for their efforts and dedication. Also, celebrities are just hard-working people who create considerable value for society. And this kind of person deserves high pay.
- Do you agree or disagree that celebrities are paid far too much money 64
- Do you agree or disagree that celebrities are paid far too much money Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your ownknowledge or experience 84
- do you agree or disagree that celebrities are paid far too much money 16
- With many problems of transport and accommodation in cities some governments are encouraging businesses to move to rural areas Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages 89
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...elebrities without considering anything, as they just want to believe what they b...
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...his kind of person deserves high pay.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, for example, i think, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 448.0 315.596192385 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97098214286 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7239044874 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 176.041082164 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580357142857 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 506.74238477 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 0.809619238477 865% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.976822707 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7916666667 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0597572201032 0.244688304435 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.018831637943 0.084324248473 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0267105205359 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0382138861366 0.151304729494 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0114844502015 0.056905535591 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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