Doctors nurses and teachers make a great contribution to the society and should be payed more than entertainment and sports celebrities Do you agree or disagree

There is no doubt that the role of nurses and teachers in developing our society is crucial. Consequently, they deserve to be more high-paid than famous people such as sports and entertaiment stars. From my perspective, I partly agree with the opinion because of their equal importance, which will be discussed deeply in the following essay.

On the one hand, education and healthcare service are some of the top priorities of every nation of all ages since human society is unable tobe improved and ennovated without them. To carry out these missons, teachers and doctors are the backbone in taking care of and ensuring citizens' well being and giving a profound insight into new knowlege to students. As a result, there will be more high qualified and healthy workforce who are in charge of producing a great quantity of goods and properties,meeting essential demands of human life and securing the countrties' economic stabitilty and growth. Moreover, it takes them a long period of time to pursuit these jobs due to their typically professional characteristics. To illustrate, in Vietnam as well as other nations, teachers and doctors basically spend about 5 or 6 years studying at university and 2 or 3 years later getting more practical experience before being accepted officially by students and patients. Such are hard and challenging jobs that not many people are willing to engage in over their lifetime. In short, since no one can deny the vital part of these professions and their deligence, high salary must be the key to encourage them to keep going with their chosen carreers.

On the other hand,famous sports people and entertainment stars also share the same fundamental position as doctors and teachers; therefore, they should be equally recognized and get the right amount of money for their great devotion to the society as a whole. That celebrities have brought to our world since the ancient times is magnificient and indispensable. If doctors and teachers are responsible for buiding up the high qualified labour, well-known sports people, actors or singers help create and maintain mental health of inhabitants. Only by being entertained through various forms of relaxation can they relieve their pressures on a daily basis. In these days and age, with the increasing development of technology, not only can you find the appearance of famous people on TV, on the Internet or on social networking sites with a varierty of dedicated albums, films or sports achievements but you can also hear about their daily life stories, their outlook and even their scandals everywhere at anytime. However negatively or positively they have been affecting our social life, the celebrities' contribution is globally awarded. Subsequently, what they achieve from their valuable devotion and tenacious efforts such as money or fans' admiration should not be compared to other jobs such as teachers and doctors who are commissioned to do different things in their carreers.

In summary, although teachers, doctors, sportspeople and enterainment stars have their own distinguishing functions, they are all considered tobe primary and integral workfore of all societies of all age. As a result, it is impossible to make comparisons beween the amount of money they recieve as they are all worth highly paid salaries.

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Average: 9.5 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, in short, no doubt, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05810397554 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86154320363 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617737003058 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.8784046275 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.833333333 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.25 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217506464819 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703331382241 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548310884855 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129706267466 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322110016464 0.056905535591 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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