Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small local business are unable to compete Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities To what extent do you agree o

In recent years, many small-sized enterprises cannot complete with their supermarket rivals- which have been increased significantly in both terms of market share and scale. A segment of society opines that this phenomenon is more likely to lead to the erosion of local communities. Personally, I advocate this view considering some compelling reasons offered below.

The expansion of supermarkets and the loss of small shops may drain localities’ economic and social capital. Money spent on independent retail outlets tends to stay in the community, providing work for residents such as builders, farmers or local accountants. A research found that 100 dollars spent on a local store generates 60% more local activities than $100 spent on a chain store. Also, supermarkets provide local inhabitants with a plethora of occupations with low wages, replacing the working chances that they used to have with much better incomes. To be more specific, if somebody wants to own their own coffee shop, they will look forward to 30.000 pounds annually. If that same person works for a café in a supermarket then they will earn only about 15000 pounds with the rest of what they should be earning going to the chairmen and directors of the supermarkets.

The decimation of small enterprises together with large quantity of department stores has a negative impact on communities’ relationships. Communities are created by myriad small daily encounters such as exchanging information in pub or talking to baker while waiting for bread. By contrast, supermarkets minimize human contact in the interests of efficiency and convenience, most recently by introducing self-service lanes for payment. People go in then leave, so there might be little sense of community. They demonstrated, I believe, supermarkets really cut the threads that hold an engaged community together.

To conclude, the widespread presence of supermarkets and closure of retail outlets are responsible for the decreasing vitality and viability of small centers. This may be responsible for the vanishing community spirit that once thrived.

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Average: 9.5 (2 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, may, really, so, then, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46788990826 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06974847253 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639143730887 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0743589687 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.75 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4375 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3125 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199012976635 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600386779997 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372799724553 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103878170654 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379070457286 0.056905535591 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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